一点趣事，记录一下，顺便练习下英语。
Today I ate dumpling at afternoon, because I haven't eat dumpling for some time .The stuffing is my favorite .It is fennel and park meat filled for dumpling. I go to the discount store after the meal . I don't want buy something originally ,but my favorite drinks is on sale , so I buy a milk tea . I know it included coffee. Something is coming.
Maybe it unduly delicious , so I drink it fast , but after I drink it a mement, my heart beat more and more quickly and I have the trots not only once, so I try to stop it , because it really make me can't work normally. I try to drink some water,and ate some fried rice .Neither are (not) effect. I haven't other method .
so only keep it, find and do something ,try to forget it .however I get off work, The rock fall down in my heart.I get off work and carry my bag and ride a shared bike, and I am very happy. I meet a girl in the cross.She is very 奇怪[orz]. She carry a very big butterfly ties and drive a skating ban , I am not understand why she carry a butterfly ties, when I see carefully ,I know she carry a big bag like a big butterfly ties. I am not understand，why she carry a like butterfly ties bag ? I think a little moment , finally I get it, maybe the bag can hide her fat.
帮你修改了下语法，句式和一些拼写哈，希望有帮助。
写作是每个人都应该掌握的技巧，作为第一步流水账没啥问题，但是可以多注意下措辞，查查字典什么的，加油鸭期待你的下一篇！
I had dumplings this afternoon because it had been a long time since I last had it. The dumplings were my favorite fennel and meat filled kind. After dinner I went around to the discount store, I didn't have anything specific to buy but my favorite drink was on sale so I got a cup of milk tea. I knew it included caffeine, and then something interesting happened.
I drank that milk tea quickly because it was so good, but my heart was beating faster and faster as I finished it. I tried to stop this because it has made me unable to function properly. I tried drinking some water and eating some fried rice, but nothing worked.
I had no choice but to keep it that way, find something else to do and try to forget about the uncomfortable feeling. I was having fun after work with my bag on my back and riding a shared bike. Then I saw there's a girl at the intersection. She looked a little strange because she was carrying a big butterfly tie and driving a scooter. The big tie made me confused and when I looked closer, I found that she was carrying a big bag that looked like a butterfly tie. I couldn't get why she was carrying a bag like that. But after thinking for a while, I finally understood that maybe this bag could hide her fat.
我感觉最大的问题是用中文的表达方式套了个英文的壳。导致的结果就是：读者看得懂你每一个字，但连起来却抓不住你要表达的东西。
英文跟中文的不同之处是，中文是表意的：你看到一个字，就知道它的意思；而英文是表音的：你读出一个词，就能大概知道它的意思，比如 like -> likely （大部分是这样，但也有例外，比如一些拉丁语、古罗马语等语言的外来词）
因此，作为我们这种非语言/语法专业的普通人，改进文章最简单可行的办法就是写完之后朗读出来，如果读得顺口听得通畅，那么大概率都过得去。例如经楼上版主修改后的，读起来就很顺畅，也是一篇很不错的日记
有点可爱怎么回事，像看到小朋友写作文。
除了开头注意到时态，后面全部都忘了？
[捂脸] 就是小朋友写作文嘛！毕业以后，英语就没怎么用过，忘得一塌糊涂，小时候学汉语就是写日记，像流水账，行文中夹杂着错字，错词，错误用法，甚至也掺杂着拼音，我们还是过来了。whatever I will stady hard !
study hard？练习也要讲究方法和效率吧。。。感觉你这样只是在重复错误，得不到很好的提高。